Comments

Stephanie's Outline

I think your outline is good so far. Your thesis i enjoyed because i have the same ideas and how you talked about people being socially challenged. I think you shoud talk more about the movie Wall-E and what happened exactly. I agree with Matt that you have good arguments and you
have potential for a great paper. =)

Matthew's Outline

I thought your outline was well put out and on point. You were very specific on your arguments and elaborated well. I thought your thesis was simple and staight to the point which is good. For your rough draft you might want to use useful sources in class that we use especially Feed for your argument.